Tagged. You’re “It”

crosswalk

Impatiently, he sat at the crosswalk, watching the woman steadfastly make her way from one side to the other. She wasn’t what he’d consider old, by any means. Yet her gait was slow and deliberate, though she held a regal posture as she attempted not to appear unbalanced in her orthopedic boot. He wondered whatever would possess someone to accept that a perfect stranger (behind a ton of steel with a motor attached) would be honorable enough to maintain the steadiness of his own balance on a braking mechanism much smaller than his foot size. She didn’t seem concerned, as she made her way across, about such an unthinkable, yet potential, act happening within a millisecond of time; how it might crumple her entire body into a heap and render the rest of her as useless as the weakened appendage she was now trying to protect inside that monstrous boot.

Dusk had already settled into deep twilight, making an act like the one he’d just thought up that much easier, he knew. The driver wouldn’t even have to be concerned with the body’s disposal. A hit and run in an unregistered vehicle by a man no one could describe, and the woman’s life would end instantly. She’d feel pain for such a short time. The car could be dumped, the money collected, and then it’d be time to move on. That kind of job was lucky, matching the challenge of taking candy from a baby. Who cared enough to even give her a second thought?

So why, then, did he find himself carefully studying her, thinking about her, wondering how she’d gotten here, to this moment? Surely her story wasn’t nearly as interesting as his had once been, before he’d gotten bored with the nagging details of guilt surrounding all his past deeds. So why did he find himself hatching a plan to study her more closely, to personally acquaint himself with a woman who was sitting atop a mercenary’s tag list?

© 2013 jody love

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This is one of the newer writing projects I’ve been working on and am expecting to turn out as a novella, by estimated length based on the outlined phase of what it’s going to take to complete the story. My WIP title is simply Hitman. I’d surely appreciate any feedback on this one.

This abridged intro was written in response to Trifecta’s Week 70 challenge:

On to the weekly prompt. Pay attention to the third definition, as always. Good lucky!
1: having good luck
2: happening by chance : fortuitous
3: producing or resulting in good by chance : favorable
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  • You may not use a variation of the word; it needs to be exactly as stated above.
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17 thoughts on “Tagged. You’re “It”

  1. Well, such intricate, philosophical slowing down of time, just before a major hit…maybe..is a beautifully chosen moment. The foot..maybe the result of a first attempt, but how well it features

    • thanks so much for the feedback, Euan (love the name, btw – used it symbolically in my 1st completed work — it goes quite well with the meaning of your Trifecta piece this week that I just finished reading too) 🙂 -j

  2. I honestly think that other people just inspire us without even knowing it. It’s the one thing I love about the human race, the small, seemingly inconsequential things that make us who we are and interesting to other people. I mean, truly, what would make a hit man change his mind, hold back, hesitate if not something about that woman that captures his attention, that reminds him of his own humaness?

    I loved this.

    • Thank you, Kir, once again for putting so much thought into the characters and the story. I like to believe that everyone has the potential for redemption – whether they choose to accept it or not. Both of these two have some pasts to face up to first.

  3. Intriguing. I wouldn’t suppose that a hit man would come across too many targets like this woman with an orthopedic boot. I knew someone once who was very much as you describe walking across the street. Interestingly she was a piece of work, as the phrase goes, always causing trouble at the Library where I worked. There were people who would have paid this guy. Fascinating piece.

  4. This piece fascinates me, with this glimpse into the workings of this hit man’s mind! I’d love to know what happens next!

    Or would I…

    Great job with the prompt!!

  5. Intriguing theme-wonder who would want to want her out of the way?Is she very rich & does not know it?Very well done,enjoyed it -looking forward to the novella,all the best Jody:-)

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