The Chastised Idle-ized

What be dat foolishness I hear tell comin’ outta’ yor mouth, child?!

Idle hands be dat ol’ devil’s work?! Dat what I hear you say?!

Whoo-whee. Why, no sir-ree. Can’t say dat strikes me as havin’ one tee-ninecy ounce o’ truth to it. Tweren’t dem dere hands who be decidin’ dat dey would or dey would not do dat ol’ work today – or what dey should or dey should not be a’doin’ instead.

Nuh-uh. Now don’t you go a’foolin’ yoself ‘bout dat, young sir – or tryin’ ta’ fool anybody else dat’ll listen, fo dat matter. ‘Specially not me! Ya’ hear? Somebody’s been a’fillin’ yor head full o’ some grand-i-ose nonsense, dey have. And, let me tell you sumptin’ else. I can smell it from here, I can.

Now just when did yorn feet ever once tell yorn head where dey was a’goin’ to take it? And on which occasion did dat well-educated mouth o’ yorn decide ta’ speak fo itself dat it didn’t get yor breeches a good heatin’ up?

Why, Laud, have mercy, no! Child, don’t you know dat be why de Good Laud, hisself, be a’givin’ you dat mind fo you ta’ be a’usin’ fo yoself? Why, dat way, dat ol’ devil – den, he can’t be a’usin’ it fo you!

So don’t you be a’goin’ and blamin’ dem dere poor ol’ hands o’ yorns, ya’ hear? Dat’s right. ‘Cause I tell ya’, sir – dem dere hands…dey be downright in-no-cent!



Throwing this one in the Cajun-ized pot this week and letting the spices simmer just an itty-bitty-bit to serve up for the Trifecta Week Sixty Writing Challenge. Be sure to follow the trike link to vote (or to enter your own piece). No, there aren’t any prizes. It’s all in good fun – and great exercise for the brain…so it won’t become this week’s word…

1: lacking worth or basis : vain <idle chatter> <idle pleasure>
2: not occupied or employed: as
a : having no employment : inactive <idle workers>
b : not turned to normal or appropriate use <idle farmland>
c : not scheduled to compete <the team will be idle tomorrow>
3: a : shiftless, lazyb : having no evident lawful means of support

Please remember:
  • Your response must be between 33 and 333 words.
  • You must use the 3rd definition of the given word in your post.
  • The word itself needs to be included in your response.
  • You may not use a variation of the word; it needs to be exactly as stated above.
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27 thoughts on “The Chastised Idle-ized

    • TY. I love dialects and colloquialisms, as they bring a unique richness to the character (whether real-life or fiction) — but I respect that all readers don’t; so I always appreciate it when someone who does lets me know. 🙂

  1. great voice and character! Where will it go from here? Wish you’d done my first person point of view challenge….:)

  2. Wise old woman(i hope).It took me three readings to understand it as I am not familiar with this kind of talk but hats off to you for executing this so well:-)

      • Ha!ha!I guess your submission forced me to stop being idle;-)Yes ,it did.I thought maybe it was how the Negroes spoke like in”Gone with the wind”?Well,learn something new today:-)

        • If you didn’t have a lot of exposure to Southern culture, I can see how “Gone with the Wind” would’ve come to mind. It’s more of an over-emphasis of deep bayou Cajun (non-race specific) – and I even wrote it to be non-gender specific for the speaker, so the reader could use his/her own imagination (just as you obviously came up with a character in your mind). Let me give you an auditory treat with the Cajun chef, Justin Wilson:

Go Ahead - Tickle My Ear...

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